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[诗歌]献给母亲

jessaminlee: 有多少个夜里

我梦见自己是一泓清泉

在母亲的心田悠悠流淌

耳边全是花儿放歌的节拍

有多少个夜里

我梦见自己是一缕春风

在母亲的世界醉醉徜徉

眼前全是叶儿舞动的韵律

有多少个夜里

我梦见自己是一位诗人

在母亲的诗里浅浅吟唱

宇宙响起天籁舒缓的伴奏

有多少个夜里

我梦见自己是一位画家

在母亲画像前静静伫足

天地披上天使圣洁的光芒

没有梦的夜里

我是一朵小小的蒲公英

在母亲目光里遥遥飘荡

世界满是挂念牵起的沧桑
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发表于 08-05-10 11:00 (固定链接 )
stonefather: 1

“没有梦的夜里/我是俗世里的一颗尘埃/在母亲目光里遥遥飘荡”，前面的铺垫和渲染，只为这一写尽母爱的诗行，好诗欣赏了！“没有梦的夜里/我是俗世里的一颗尘埃/在母亲目光里遥遥飘荡”，前面的铺垫和渲染，只为这一写尽母爱的诗行，好诗欣赏了！

发表于 08-05-10 12:29 (固定链接 )
na727346219: 2

没有梦的夜里

我是俗世里的一颗尘埃

在母亲目光里遥遥飘荡

世界满是挂念牵起的沧桑

欣赏好诗!母爱无边!祝愿我们的妈妈永远年轻漂亮!
 <P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 20.15pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.92; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; tab-stops: 45.8pt 91.6pt 137.4pt 183.2pt 229.0pt 274.8pt 320.6pt 366.4pt 412.2pt 458.0pt 503.8pt 549.6pt 595.4pt 641.2pt 687.0pt 732.8pt">没有梦的夜里 <P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 20.15pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.92; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; tab-stops: 45.8pt 91.6pt 137.4pt 183.2pt 229.0pt 274.8pt 320.6pt 366.4pt 412.2pt 458.0pt 503.8pt 549.6pt 595.4pt 641.2pt 687.0pt 732.8pt">我是俗世里的一颗尘埃 <P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 20.15pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.92; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; tab-stops: 45.8pt 91.6pt 137.4pt 183.2pt 229.0pt 274.8pt 320.6pt 366.4pt 412.2pt 458.0pt 503.8pt 549.6pt 595.4pt 641.2pt 687.0pt 732.8pt">在母亲目光里遥遥飘荡 <P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 20.15pt; mso-char-indent-count: 1.92; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; tab-stops: 45.8pt 91.6pt 137.4pt 183.2pt 229.0pt 274.8pt 320.6pt 366.4pt 412.2pt 458.0pt 503.8pt 549.6pt 595.4pt 641.2pt 687.0pt 732.8pt">世界满是挂念牵起的沧桑 欣赏好诗!母爱无边!祝愿我们的妈妈永远年轻漂亮!

发表于 08-05-10 13:21 (固定链接 )
jessaminlee: 3

谢石头与天堂的鼓励！

关于母亲，一直想用诗来表达对她的感情，因为她在我心目中是那么伟大、无私！我却总是苦于不知从何下笔，明天母亲节，就勉强凑和了一首，意在通过梦与现实的对比，表达对报答母亲“心有余而力不足”的愧疚感，感觉根本无法表达我想要表达的东西，惭愧了……

祝天下所有父亲母亲母亲节快乐！
 谢石头与天堂的鼓励！ 关于母亲，一直想用诗来表达对她的感情，因为她在我心目中是那么伟大、无私！我却总是苦于不知从何下笔，明天母亲节，就勉强凑和了一首，意在通过梦与现实的对比，表达对报答母亲“心有余而力不足”的愧疚感，感觉根本无法表达我想要表达的东西，惭愧了…… 祝天下所有父亲母亲母亲节快乐！

发表于 08-05-10 14:24 (固定链接 )
jessaminlee: 4

对了，经雨点老师的指点，我将“我是俗世里的一颗尘埃”改成“我是一朵小小的浦公英”感觉恰当些，呵呵……对了，经雨点老师的指点，我将“我是俗世里的一颗尘埃”改成“我是一朵小小的浦公英”感觉恰当些，呵呵……

发表于 08-05-10 14:27 (固定链接 )
stonefather: 5

哈哈，其实，“蒲公英”这一形象并不见得能完全显示母爱的公平和包容性——“尘埃”似乎更好些：巨人也罢，侏儒也好，母亲眼里是一样的；鲜花也好，尘埃也罢，母亲心里也是一样的。一点愚见，未知当否？
哈哈，其实，“蒲公英”这一形象并不见得能完全显示母爱的公平和包容性——“尘埃”似乎更好些：巨人也罢，侏儒也好，母亲眼里是一样的；鲜花也好，尘埃也罢，母亲心里也是一样的。一点愚见，未知当否？

发表于 08-05-10 18:16 (固定链接 )
jane20007: 6

很美的一首诗歌，温婉的爱在字里行间流淌. 欣赏了！很美的一首诗歌，温婉的爱在字里行间流淌. 欣赏了！

发表于 08-05-10 23:43 (固定链接 )
fengxing2000nian: 7

叶子，诗人哉？为母亲成诗人，好！感情充沛的一首小诗，韵律感还要锤炼，但母亲需要的不是韵律感，而是诗里的深情和眷恋。叶子，诗人哉？为母亲成诗人，好！感情充沛的一首小诗，韵律感还要锤炼，但母亲需要的不是韵律感，而是诗里的深情和眷恋。

发表于 08-05-12 04:09 (固定链接 )
gaojing66186818: 8

母爱是临行的针脚

它在不停里缝补儿时衣裳

母爱是微笑的暖阳

是考试归来丰收的秋实

母爱是水粉画里的银盘

放上一堆紫色的葡萄

格外鲜丽

母爱是草地上的蒙古包

我如那羔羊

黄昏上的云彩是母亲的呼喊

催我早早回家的盼望

母爱是江河里的浪涛

流到下面的池凹

就从来没有希望

水会倒流

母爱是天上的月光

她总是在瞧望

那远千里外的影子

 母爱是临行的针脚 它在不停里缝补儿时衣裳 母爱是微笑的暖阳 是考试归来丰收的秋实 母爱是水粉画里的银盘 放上一堆紫色的葡萄 格外鲜丽 母爱是草地上的蒙古包 我如那羔羊 黄昏上的云彩是母亲的呼喊 催我早早回家的盼望 母爱是江河里的浪涛 流到下面的池凹 就从来没有希望 水会倒流 母爱是天上的月光 她总是在瞧望 那远千里外的影子 

发表于 08-05-12 08:57 (固定链接 )
jessaminlee: 9

谢小筑、方舟、清流的光临！

石头，关于“尘埃”与“蒲公英”，我的看法与你是一致的。

但雨点老师说的也有道理：“我觉得蒲公英比尘埃要合适。蒲公英是婆婆丁的种子，他们随风飘荡，落在合适的地方就生根发芽，又繁育一大片蒲公英，这非常像母亲与女儿的关系！”他说“尘埃”太消极了。呵呵，所以我还是改成“蒲公英”了，谢谢你的鼓励哦！

方舟，我也觉得没有韵律感，可是我把头发全挠下来也找不到灵感啊，你也不帮帮我。
谢小筑、方舟、清流的光临！ 石头，关于“尘埃”与“蒲公英”，我的看法与你是一致的。 但雨点老师说的也有道理：“我觉得蒲公英比尘埃要合适。蒲公英是婆婆丁的种子，他们随风飘荡，落在合适的地方就生根发芽，又繁育一大片蒲公英，这非常像母亲与女儿的关系！”他说“尘埃”太消极了。呵呵，所以我还是改成“蒲公英”了，谢谢你的鼓励哦！ 方舟，我也觉得没有韵律感，可是我把头发全挠下来也找不到灵感啊，你也不帮帮我。

发表于 08-05-12 09:58 (固定链接 )